https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MHVAbaMFkQM&feature=youtu.be
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch. Describe what stood out to you as important, what feedback surprised you the most, what feedback you think was outright wrong or silly.
Several things from the comments stood out to me. Most of
the students said that the beginning of the pitch really grabbed their
attention and that I looked professional in the video. They all noticed the
difference between that video and the previous one which did not include the
mentorship program. I think all those points were important but what surprised
me the most was the fact that a couple of them mentioned that I lacked
enthusiasm in my speech. I don’t think there was any comments that I thought
were wrong all silly. Thankfully the students gave very constructive criticisms.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I tried to be more enthusiastic in my new pitch and less monotone. That way I'll be able to hold the viewer's attention all the way through.
I feel like most people are getting feedback on the look of the pitch instead of the pitch itself. Your's looks really good, you're engaging, and dynamic. I'm not bored looking at you talk which i think is the most important part because you have to keep who ever youre talking to interested in what you're saying. All in all good job! :)
ReplyDeleteCheck mine out? http://adnabrkanicent3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
I think it's good that you took away not only feedback on your product but also on your presentation. This will help you not only grow this one project but will help prepare you for all future endeavors. Great job and great progress on the enthusiasm! You can see my elevator pitch here: http://katieshirley.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
ReplyDeleteI thought you did well improving in this new pitch. I also like the idea that you have, and think that it could be beneficial. The mentorship program could definitely help lots of students. The only thing about this pitch is that it was very hard to hear on my computer, but that could just be my laptop. check out my post here:http://keifermcclainent3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-3.html
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